Sunday, September 13, 2009

My Personal Statement

I am a recent graduate with a Bachelor of Science in Applied Mathematics in the National University of Singapore. Although I do not possess a banking related degree, I have always been interested in the banking financial services. Thus, I took modules such as Financial Mathematics and Economics to gain a better insight to the industry. Financial Mathematics deals with the quantitative side of Finance, which I believe will be essential in the financial services industry. Economics allowed me to have a better idea how the economy will affect banking decisions and the various strategies taken to try to correct the stimulus. In addition, I was fortunate to be able to deal with trade bills and drafting of Letter of Credit, although I had no prior experience or knowledge of it. Initially, I was recruited into Sumitomo Mitsui Banking Corporation (SMBC) as an administrative assistant whose job is to deal with mainly the administrative demands of the department. However, I proved myself to be a keen learner and efficient worker thus I was given the chance to process and settle trade bills documents on top of my administrative duties and assisted the Assistant Manager in drafting Letter of Credit.

Throughout my academic career, I have always been a resolute and dependable individual. I was appointed a leader in various stages in my academic career which shows that I am a dependable and responsible person among my peers. Being a leader has trained me to be more decisive and disciplined and allowed me to have better interactive skills with my peers without compromising the fact that I am responsible for leading them and honed my skills in planning and organizing events.

I have also contributed to campus life by participating in voluntary events such as Paint-A-Home to redecorate the children’s home in hope of bringing colors of joy and adding new perspectives of lives to the residents of the home, besides refurbishing and improving the aesthetic outlook of the welfare home. I participated in this meaningful activity as I believe that there are many other unfortunate kids out there whose welfare has been neglected and us, being more affluent than them, should try to make a difference in their life and let them have a more enjoyable childhood. In addition, I was appointed the Orientation Group Leader and office bearers for committees in my faculty which further honed my leadership skills. Being part of the program committee of TalentQuest , a nationwide talent competition, I have gained valuable skills such as liaising and management skills.

I have also represented my school in Basketball and attained 4th in the A division and was thus awarded for outstanding contribution in 2006. Representing school in basketball has its demands as it involves several trainings during the season period thus I had to juggle between studies and the trainings. This had made me a well-rounded individual and able to better cope with stress. I was also an active member in the basketball club during university. In addition, i was involved in the organization of the basketball 3-on-3 tournament as an office bearer. Having organized similar events before, I helped in making the event a smoother and successful one.

Therefore, as an Analyst in Operations, I believe that I am able to excel in the Program given my qualities and capabilities. As Credit Suisse is a highly regarded global financial services industry, Operations department is the utmost important as it manages and executes millions of transactions on top of engaging with people worldwide. Thus, it will require individuals who are efficient in their work and display good teamwork. Credit Suisse is also involved in corporate philanthropic events to improve the lives of the poor and sponsorship that promotes young talent in sports. I believe I will be able to contribute to Credit Suisse in these areas as I have the passion and the capabilities for it. I hope to be able to part of your company and be involved in the unique vibrant culture.

5 comments:

  1. That was a flawless statement.

    You have managed to convey to the reader your qualities and skills that could make you one of the more ideal candidates.

    Even though you may not have a banking related degree, you certainly showed that you have banking related skills and some amount of experience in the industry.

    I cannot find any fault in your statement. I think that as far as personal statements go, yours is certainly in the top 12 of the class.

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  4. Hi Angelina,

    Contrary to Idris, I have a couple of suggestions and critiques to make. Hope you will take them without offense as I am a pretty much critical person (I think) >.<

    First and foremost, I think your first paragraph could be clearer; the part where you started mentioning the drafting of Letter of Credit would be more effective if it were put into a separate paragraph. I believe that would make the introductory paragraph more concise as well.

    Secondly, you mentioned in the 2nd paragraph that you had been assigned leadership roles in various stages of your academic career, but exactly what positions did you take up and how did you actually handle them? This is something I believe the employer would be very much interested to know.

    Lastly, it is really great that you have been involved in volunteer activities. However, I think it may be of concern to the employer whether you could link it to how it would be relevant to the position you are applying for.

    It is undeniable that the content of your personal statement is good and shows your desire to be a part of the company. These are but my two cents worth :)

    Cheers,
    CF

    P.S. Pardon my constant deleting and editing of comment, needed to re-sentence a couple of lines so that my points would be better understood :) If in doubt at any point, please feel free to raise up to me! :)

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  5. Overall a great personal statement. However I think the first paragraph should be shorter. Details about what you've read in NUS and work exp should come later.

    Contrary to Chun Fong I it is alright you include your voluntary activities as I think it would be good for employers to know you're such a compassionate person =P (Some MNC will do voluntary work to boost their image so they might like it if their staff are passionate about it. That is my opinion)

    That's all I have to say:)

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